4. How about changing "This would" to "The weapon was intended to", "as well as" to "while also", and "civilian consumption" to "civilian purchase"?
"This would benefit their security forces as well as offering a compact and effective weapon for civilian consumption."
8. I think I understand your intentions on that point, but I would like to see the the Safety mode and the Semi-automatic modes marked with more clarity. I would suggest something similar to what I copied and edited below.
"Safety (The weapon cannot charge or fire), Semi-Automatic (The weapon will fire 1 charge per 4 seconds maximum)"
I'm currently talking to Fred about the DR, and I'll get back to you on that as soon as possible. As I said before, I believe that the weapon could be effective against personnel and power armor targets (up to Tier 5), but I'm not sure if DRv3 really conveys that effectively.