This review is for: [KFY] CAMIE M11 Construction Mecha
The submitted article is/has…
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[X] Artwork (Art will probably be required only for PC races, starships, power armor, and guns.)
[X] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[X] In the proper format/template
[X] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[X] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[X] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[X] No red and/or broken links
[X] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[X] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[X ] Obtusely redundant
[X] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[
?] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[X] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[X] Lacking Detail
[X] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[X] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[X] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[X] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[X] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
As it is manufactured by KFY, it is subject to Wes's final approval.
Status:Pending
Notes
The CAMIE M11 is weaker performance wise compared to it's closest approved competitor in the civilian mecha field, the
Origin M1 Oban. However, the M11 is better suited and cost effective for its intended role as a construction mecha. There are no obvious game-balancing issues between the two.
I intend to finish this review by: 11th June