Okay, thanks. On to the general things.
Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...
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] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
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] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
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] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
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] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
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] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate
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] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
[ N/A ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)
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] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ N/A ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ No - I will tag Wes when I feel the article is A OK! ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.
Here's some fixes this article still needs:
Please use oxford commas, especially in titles (I think the title with pool area needed one).
Include a history section. Because it is so close to where Geshrinoplis once was, did the Fourth Elysian War impact them? Also, it has been around for generations, but of what species' generations (what species is the family predominantly, so we as readers get a sense of what time has elapsed since its founding?)? And add in your own history flavor, of course!
Instead of having each section of the compound have its own huge header, make those smaller sub-headers within a header of that four = header you are using that is layout or something of the like.
Great article! Thank you for submitting this and have a great time editing this. Please let me know in this thread when you have made the edits, which should be made in the article itself. Again, thank you!!
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Pending Submitter