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Approved Submission Metallica Corpus (wip)

Andrew

SARP WikiGuru and Staff
Staff Member
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FM of Yamatai
Game Master
Hello,

Thank you for the submission! Now I know this is your first try at this, so let us go over some things.

1. I see a reference to Omnispex which is a Warhammer reference, (https://warhammer40k.fandom.com/wiki/Omnispex). We make a real effort on Star Army to keep our material our own. In fact, I see several augmented references to both Warhammer and Warframe concepts in the post. I thank you, again, for being brave and submitting something when you're so new to the site. So I have some other recommendations I will share with you.

2. Being that your character is from Nepleslia it would probably be reasonable to say that a suit would have Nepleslian parts and technology that matches the actual Nepleslain setting. So maybe one of the Nepleslia FMs or other players would be able to help you design an armor suit that fits the setting. I think that this would be a good opportunity for you and for them to welcome you into that faction in a productive way.

A good technology article should have references to existing technologies and concepts from the faction they are produced in, or at least follow a logical tree of technology development for that faction.

So my suggestion here, is that we set your submission post to "On Hold" status while you take some time to learn the setting and perhaps reach out to other players/GMs/FMs to assist you in making this suit match the setting better.
 

WanTheFloof

Member
Mmm. Omnispex is very much. I'll change the name.

Not, sure what the rest are though. I thought they were pretty original.
 

Ametheliana

Sensei
Staff Member
Submissions Reviewer
FM of Nepleslia
FM of the Iromakuanhe
Game Master
@Legix might enjoy working with you on this to fit the setting a bit more.
 

Andrew

SARP WikiGuru and Staff
Staff Member
Site Supporter
Submissions Reviewer
FM of Yamatai
Game Master
Excellent! Thank you for working with us on this. We are happy to have you and welcome, again, to Star Army!

Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...

[ ✅ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
[ ✅ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
[ ✅ ] 3. The article follows our wiki-style guidelines, including No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ✅ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
[ ✅ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
[ ✅ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
[ ✅ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)
[ ✅ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ✅ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ✅ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.

Submission Approved
 
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