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Approved Submission [Nesh] Tokir've + Mekir've Variable Plasma Sidearms + Ammunition

SirSkully

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Before anyone says anything yes, this is two weapons in one submission, though they are rather similar in a lot of aspects and one can just do more than the other so I figured it would be alright - kind of the whole Civilian vs Military NSP thing except I made two pages instead of just one with a subsection for variations, anywho here, a military and a civilian plasma pistol.
 
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Alright sorry for the wait @Syaoran but I believe it has been fixed up now (I also made changes to the recoil and cost section of the Mekir've accordingly)
 
Okay on the Tokir've you've got a section at the bottom called 'recoil' but I think it's the safety mechanism?

For the Mekir've, the pricing section is from the Tokir've. Also you have run on sentences in the first half of the article. But the second paragraph the order of the information might need to be changed so it flows more naturally.
 
Yeah sorry, I fixed the Tokir've a little while ago but forgot to do the Mekir've, they should hopefully be good now?
 
Sorry I didn't get a ping for this thread, I'll get on that, I apologize for the delay.

Since I looked over everything before and everything left was only small changes I was able to grammar and spell check this.

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They both look good and I'll give them the APRPOVAL
 
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