Welcome to the SARP,
Let's get started with review.
Weight 1588 ??? Need unit of weight, as well as correcting.
Since you have a male feel free to remove the bra references.
Distinguished features: Yamataians regenerate, so they don't scar and they regrow missing parts.
Personality "tends to not judge people until after they have presented one another" what does this mean?
Dislikes You say he doesn't dislike anything or anyone, but in personality you say he goes evil on seeing someone hurt a child. That sounds like it should be in the dislikes.
Okay, You chose a Yamataian, what was his species when he was born? Yamataians did not exist until YE 27. Why did he make the change to the Yamataian body?
History needs work, it should cover the information I mentioned above. Your history stops just after leaving the ship? No mention as to what happened after that, how did he live? where did he live, why did he choose to join the Star Army?
Skills
You are missing two required skills for SAoY members see,
Necessary Skills, so you need to take out two of the skills you have
Overall not a bad first attempt.
This character is not yet approved for IC usage.
