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Approved Submission NP-ADS "Raven" Dropship

Syaoran

Staff Member
Submissions Reviewer
FM of Abwehr
Game Master
Okay looking through this and I corrected grammar and spelling mistakes but there was also a phrasing issue, that would require me change word intentions to fix it:

  • Under the interiors descriptions, under the standard troop module, it says "The compartment is compact and seats 16 troops, just enough room for up to heavy infantry units." The second half of the sentence, I think I get what you're trying to say but can you reword it, the structure reads kinda funny and gets confusing if you mean one thing or if you missed a word.
 

Jack Pine

Staff Member
FM of S6
Game Master
How does that edit work? I elaborated on what size that meant, as well as added a footnote on how they are "seated" for travel.
 

Syaoran

Staff Member
Submissions Reviewer
FM of Abwehr
Game Master
That wording works much better that's good. Also apologies, I should've said this in my first post, but I didn't notice until now. This craft seems to be missing an atmospheric velocity.
 

Syaoran

Staff Member
Submissions Reviewer
FM of Abwehr
Game Master
Here you go


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