This review is for:
Origin Armored Pilot Suit
The submitted article is/has…
[ ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ ] Artwork (illustrations are strongly encouraged for all spacecraft and handheld items)
[*] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[*] In the proper format/template
[*] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[*] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[*] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[*] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[*] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[ ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ ] Obtusely redundant
[ ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ ] Lacking Detail
The article has…
[N/A] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[*] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[*] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary: The following three (3) items in the checklist are not satisfied:
* No topic sentence (i.e. something like "The Pilot Suit is a spacesuit intended for use in Origin Mecha and fightercraft").
* No Artwork. However, the design is simple enough (and has sufficient detail) that I think a reader can get a fairly good idea what it looks like. In any event this
is not a discqualifing lack in non-ship submissions.
*
Standard Product Nomenclature System not followed.
Once these items are resolved
I do not see any reason that this submission should not be approved.
Notes: In regards to concerns that the submission lacks certain ammenties/safety features, as the submitter stated this was intential. If anything, I can see a potential RP benifit from their exclusion ("Armor Pilot In Near-Fatal Crash. Sues Origin Industries, Claims Critical Safety Features Ommited.")