I've been called to weigh in on this article, however, considering what I see here in the thread, I will start my post with it being off-topic and then move on-topic.
Though Sigma comes off as abrasive here in the NTSE, his concerns, like any other person's, are valid and worth considering at the very least. To act on them or not, judging the articles and so forth all naturally fall on NTSE Mods. Despite this discrepancy between words and power, just because someone isn't an NTSE Mod, does not make their viewpoints, feedback and criticisms worthless, which I ask you to keep in mind Ira.
I'm not happy with either of you in regards to this specific squabble.
Moving on.
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Looking at the Raiken, I will first focus on the technical matters before talking about my own personal opinion on them.
The article itself just barely has enough content to get by and be approved. Yes, the basics are there, but not elaborated on in detail to further explain the nuances and complexities behind the numerous different oddities the Raiken have. Considering their differences and quirks are one of their selling points that you made Sham, this hurts the article's and species' own unique 'taste'. It hurts the whole point that was made.
Going on, I find the template used for the article to be horrible. It's only with a bit of digging that I realize that this is the same template that was previously used for another species, which I should have caught back then but didn't due to sitting that one out. Though I made that mistake then, I won't make it here again in the same capacity - there's better to choose from Shammy. The one Exhack made for his
Iromakuanhe is much better - absolutely superb I feel - even though the namespace it resides in is now dated. This template he used separates history, culture and so forth into their own respective articles, allowing for far more detail and flavor to the species and faction as a whole.
However, as I said before, this article
technically passes all the requirements needed for approval. As someone else pointed out to me however, I'm "used to Ferrari's, while this is a Honda Civic" in regards to articles - this, I am very aware of and have taken into account. Regardless, this leads me to my own Personal Opinion on the species.
I'm very, very, VERY leery of this.
The reason why is that I honestly don't know if you have any staying power in regards to the Raiken Shammy. Let me use a puppy as an allegory; you want this puppy. You want this puppy very, very badly and worked for it for a long time. But will you feed this puppy all the time? Will you take this puppy on walks? And, will you pick up its flaming atomic shits which is throwing radioactive, carcinogenic dust everywhere as it burns? I've seen you come here Shammy, wait until you turned 16 to re-join the site. Saw you branch out and participate on SARP, even as you worked on this in the background.
And that is why I believe you should have a chance - you've worked pretty long and hard, earning this shot with the Raiken despite my very wary gut feelings towards them.
In my opinion as an NTSE Mod, I feel this article should be approved, with improvements and cleanup prior to that being highly recommended.
In all honesty, and now that I think of it, I have the feeling that no one mod should ever approve a species. We should all weigh in if possible.