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Approved Submission S6-MSF "Sparrow"

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It speaks of being REALLY modular, but it seems to be REALLY modular as far as weapons go and not in any other aspects, do you agree?

The kinetic, heat, and energy resistant gel could go with more explanation.

You didn't link anything in the first couple sections but linked it below. Move some of those links up to the top and link more of the wikifiable terms in the first few sections.

First sentence says it's meant to do anything, which is too broad. I am thinking adding something like what is in bold/italics will help: "The Sparrow is a fighter craft designed to fit any role ever needed by a ship of its class..." Is that right? Does that work? Let me know.

I don't really know why the weapons are grouped by maker? Is there a better way to organize this?

There are also a number of instances where you have not put text between headers and the bullet-point information under them.

Very cool concept! I am happy you made this article and I will be posting a checklist once it is more ready or someone else can review this, but I'll stick around if nobody else swoops in, Jack! ^^
 
Well the other systems have different options as well in most cases. And yeah weapons grouped by maker keeps them from being mixed together.

Also it can do any role a fighter sized craft can be used for, but I guess I should clarify that. As for the gel, it's just the same thing in the Revenant undersuit which never needed explaining.

Finally I'll get on filling under those headers.

Edit: I have filled under all the headings and linked terms at the top. Also adjusted the top paragraph to clarify that it can fill any role of a fight sized class.
 
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Here are some fixes this article still needs:
  1. Would you mind reducing the number of primary weapon slots by one and making it so that the Sparrow uses a weaker (Tier 9) version of the Albatross Anti-Starship Laser Array, please? It's so that the Sparrow fits within the Weapon Limitations.
  2. Quick question: how many of each engine "type" (the ones mentioned in the Propulsion section) does the Sparrow have?
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When these fixes are made, please post a reply here so I can re-check the article. Thank you!

Status: Pending
 
Well if I have to remove one, it would be the nose hardpoint, but that's an important one. If you have the wings loaded with say missiles, then the nose is your only gun mounting left. Similar how a A10 warthog carries its payload on its wings and has a vulcan in the nose for against other aircraft or ground personnel.

As for the albatross, it's not my articles so the only thing I could do is just say it's a lower tier.

For the propulsion the fighter has 4 main engines, with secondary thrusters for RTS functions. I'll edit in that clarification.

Edits: edits made.
 
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Status: Approved

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