SirSkully
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A knife I forgot I made, tagging @Jack Pine
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Approved Submission [Section 6] S6-Long Combat Knife
- Thread starter SirSkully
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FrostJaeger
Banned Member
Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...
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] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores.
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] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template.
[ ] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar.
[ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate.
[ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.
[ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern).
[ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.
Here are some fixes this article still needs:
Status: Pending
Note: The reason I said Tier 2 and not something higher (like, say, Tier 3) is because I can't see the knife itself causing "explosive separation of body parts/tissues" (the description for a weapon 3 tiers above its target's defenses) against a random Tier 0 dude lacking any sort of armor - however, I can easily see it causing "severed limbs [and] eviscerated torsos."
Now, if this was something the size of, say, a longsword then yeah, I could see it causing the aforementioned "explosive separation" - but not when the weapon's only a foot long, even if it's vibrating extremely fast. Regarding the electrical charge being Tier 2, well, it's for a similar reason: even with a fully-charged power cell, the burst itself wouldn't be able to do much damage because of the cell's small size - and besides, a Tier 2 electrical attack against your average Joe on the street is (in my official opinion) still quite capable of inducing things like heart attacks so long as they aren't grounded/insulated/etc.
Edit: Additionally, would you mind adding nomenclature information to the article, please? Sorry for not bringing it up earlier. >v<
[
] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores.[
] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template.[
] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.[
] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar.[
] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate.[
] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.[
] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern).[
] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.[
] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.[
] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.Here are some fixes this article still needs:
- Would you convert the article into the Weapon Template, please? The Shank Gauntlet is a good example of how melee weapons fit within the template.
- Would you change the title of the article to "Section 6 "Cross" Long Combat Knife,” please?
- Would you mind adding the following DRv3 information, please? I'll explain my reasoning below.
- The Long Combat Knife's purpose is Tier 2 (Medium Anti-Personnel).
- The strength of a fully-charged electrical surge is Tier 2 (Medium Anti-Personnel).
- In the Monomolecuar Edge section, the word "ludicrous" needs to be changed to something that isn't so bombastic.
- The listed price of "600 DS" in the About the Section 6 Long Combat Knife section needs to be removed, as the value of 1 DS has not been approved as being equal to that of 1 DA.
- Also in the About the Section 6 Long Combat Knife section, what has to be unscrewed in order to replace components? The pommel?
- How long does the weapon's battery last?
Status: Pending
Note: The reason I said Tier 2 and not something higher (like, say, Tier 3) is because I can't see the knife itself causing "explosive separation of body parts/tissues" (the description for a weapon 3 tiers above its target's defenses) against a random Tier 0 dude lacking any sort of armor - however, I can easily see it causing "severed limbs [and] eviscerated torsos."
Now, if this was something the size of, say, a longsword then yeah, I could see it causing the aforementioned "explosive separation" - but not when the weapon's only a foot long, even if it's vibrating extremely fast. Regarding the electrical charge being Tier 2, well, it's for a similar reason: even with a fully-charged power cell, the burst itself wouldn't be able to do much damage because of the cell's small size - and besides, a Tier 2 electrical attack against your average Joe on the street is (in my official opinion) still quite capable of inducing things like heart attacks so long as they aren't grounded/insulated/etc.
Edit: Additionally, would you mind adding nomenclature information to the article, please? Sorry for not bringing it up earlier. >v<
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FrostJaeger
Banned Member
I’ve gone ahead and marked this submission as On Hold for now; when you return, @SirSkully, notify me via DM or PM and I’ll change the status back to Pending. ^v^
(Hope you return soon, bro, and I’m always available if you need someone to vent to - I’ve been in similar situations before.)
(Hope you return soon, bro, and I’m always available if you need someone to vent to - I’ve been in similar situations before.)
FrostJaeger
Banned Member
As in, you’d like to continue working on the submission, @Jack Pine? If so, then sure, go ahead (unless @SirSkully says otherwise, of course).
FrostJaeger
Banned Member
Acknowledged, @Jack Pine. Submission starus changed back to Pending.
FrostJaeger
Banned Member
Thanks for helping with this submission, @Jack Pine! ^v^
[ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores.
[ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template.
[ ] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar.
[ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate.
[ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.
[ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern).
[ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.
Status: Approved
Thanks again for submitting an article to the wiki! Time for some final steps for the reviewer...
[ ] 1. State clearly that the article is approved in the submission thread
[ ] 2. Move the wiki article to its permanent (destination) location on the wiki
[ ] 3. Move the submission thread to the Approved Submissions subforum or get a moderator to
[ ] 4. Edit the article to add a link to the approval thread in the OOC Notes section
[ ] 5. Link other articles to the approved article as appropriate (equipment lists, etc.)
[
] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores.[
] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template.[
] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.[
] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar.[
] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate.[
] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.[
] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern).[
] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.[
] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.[
] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.Status: Approved
Thanks again for submitting an article to the wiki! Time for some final steps for the reviewer...
[
] 1. State clearly that the article is approved in the submission thread[
] 2. Move the wiki article to its permanent (destination) location on the wiki[
] 3. Move the submission thread to the Approved Submissions subforum or get a moderator to[
] 4. Edit the article to add a link to the approval thread in the OOC Notes section[
] 5. Link other articles to the approved article as appropriate (equipment lists, etc.)
