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Okay There isn't really much wrong with this honestly. However there is a bit of an organizational issue. The information about what this product is is buried deep in a history of how the product came to be. There needs to be a clearer description of what exactly is being sold. I'm mainly referring to parts like the tangible nanites and the fat that it's a contract hire and not a possession. Information like that needs to be easy to spot, I would suggest adding it to the summary at top, or making a "What you get when you buy" section. That's why it got those 2 X's
Also this part isn't about the actual approval, just a tip. I don't know the actual rules Nepleslia has about AI and sentience, but I would suggest having an article somewhere that describes them, cause the level of sapience described in the article would not let you have them work for no pay in Yamatai. Again, this isn't actually for approval, just a suggestion to make that article somewhere so people don't get confused.