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This uses Star Army Equipment, it is a piece of property of the Star Army, imo. Change destination URL to stararmy:spectre_mkii
Which gravitic drive does it use? Link it earlier if it is the FSC one.
(can boost to 0.63c for up to 60 seconds) <---I removed this. Boosts are not available in the setting.
Can you add something beyond nutrition to the range? Like the systems are operational, too, or no?
It fits in Tier 4, not 5. I put
where it needs to be changed.
I put
where you need to add text or prose.
Can you use SPINE?
Base of the wing hardpoint sounds really flimsy, especially since they are retractable.
Link to Mr. D here: "with the help of his Android for"
"Seeing the potential of the new plans along with the performance data of the old would approve the request on the grounds that it was financed by Candon himself. " (I think you need to add SARA here)
Are you sure you can have the teleportation device?
Who approved the Zesu usage?
No, you may not have this material or tech surrounding it without RP to back it. Uso does not have the ability to know how to do this with Xiulurium, plus that definitely requires more than just a call to SARA: "Xiulurium enamel over the armor plates can be energized to further enhance stealth properties so long as the surface is not chipped or damaged. If this should happen the backup system is the integrated [[faction:uso:section6:electronic_camouflage_system|]] designed by [[faction:uso:section_6|]], which can attempt to fill in the gaps though severe damage will create spots that cannot be covered from radar."
"oxygen is also supplied through the skin of his neck and lungs" (Is he getting oxygen to his lungs through a breathing apparatus?)
CFS is okay to use?
I don't know why you say the GPD on the forearm are Tier 8 when this is on the weapon's page: "Average DR: GPDs are not weapons, but they can inflict damage. Due to the variety of vehicles this device can be equipped to base damage is equal in tier to the size tier of the vehicle it is installed on. There are two modes that can inflict damage." It seems it can go one tier higher than that, later on in the article, but still, too high within the Mk. II article.
Missile launchers and ammunition need their own page.
I fixed some errors-go over my revision, PLEASE.
