Approved Submission [System] Gryzciki

[Ametheliana]

Submission Type: System
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:system:gryzciki

Faction: Nepleslia/ Lorath
FM Approved Yet? @Gunhand4171
Faction requires art? No

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? No
Contains New art? No
Previously Submitted? No

 

[Gunhand4171]

FM Approved

 

[Wes]

There's got to be a better way to list the mass than "28 to 45 kg," which makes it sound like the mass of a child.

 

[Arieg]

Solar Masses are typically the way to go.

 

[Wes]

The cast majority of the articles on SARP use scientific notation.

The wiki code would be like this:

  * Mass: 6.17 x 10<sup>29</sup> kg   (0.31 x sol)

 

[Nashoba]

Your missing the exponent

 

[Wes]

What do you mean? It's between the superscript tags.

 

[Ametheliana]

Changed, I'm pretty sure, but I didn't include the sol addition because I don't know how to do that calculation. Hope that's superfluous information or else I'll gladly listen to how to figure it out.

 

[Wes]

I hate to ask more of you but Scientific Notation is always:

[Decimal Number] x 10^[Exponent]

I don't understand how a 12 ended up there.

Also if we could get a sentence before the bullets in the planet section, that would be a big improvement. I encourage article writers to always have at least a little normal text in each section.

Other than that everything seems OK.

 

[Ametheliana]

I would like to edit my system article to reflect the need to have additional text underneath each planet's name. Let me know if I should go ahead with that or post in its approved thread beforehand, though I will certainly post in its approved thread afterwards.

I added a few sentences to those areas as well as changed the scientific notation.

It's no problem asking more of me. I should have done more research beforehand!

 

[Wes]

Sure, that sounds great!

Article approved.