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Approved Character [Taking It Back] Archival De Florres

Jimmy

Jimmy

Lover of Purple
Inactive Member
Archival "Mad" De Florres

Otherwise known as The Grey Wolf.

A...somewhat over-the-top character for Lams plot, and possibly beyond. Basically a spoilt rich kid who ran away from home and never went back. Everything about this character was designed to be somewhat rediculous, hence the accent, shape, helmet, weapons, tooth collection...

A lot of the work for this was done late at night when I start getting...strange. I expect at least one or two issues to crop up.
 
Missing the age, how long is his remaining hair, you say long, but no reference

master with the rifle. - what kind of rifle. different rifles have different properties, or are you trying to say all rifles.

Other than these issues, it looks good.
 
I've done a bit of line editing on the hair which clears it up a little more, and makes it a little more grammatically correct. Hard to believe I forget the age, must have been the late nights. :-\

As for the rifle, I'll take a little longer to think about how to reword that, but for now he specialises in ballistic gunpowder rifles. What I really meant by Master is basically he's learned to shoot to such an extent that he's also mastered secondary skills such has hiding muzzle flash as well as overall accuracy. I made mention that he practices with new weapons obsessivly before using them in the field to adjust to each of their perculiarites.

He can use most other basic weapons competently, but nothing spectacular.
 
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