This review is for: Izanagi Class Dreadnought with URL
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:stararmy:starships:izanagi-class_dreadnought
The submitted article is/has…
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] A very high level of overall quality
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[ X ] In the proper format/template
[ X ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] No red and/or broken links
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Obtusely redundant
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[X] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Lacking Detail
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
You need text after major headers/ before images/bullets/charts/etc. You do this in History and Background and Appearance and in these two instances:
NOTES:
Vehicle Complement
TEXT
Power Armor
Ship Systems
TEXT
Armored Hull and Hull Integrated Systems
It is hangar not hanger
Talking about glassing a planet easily is bombastic language and not a neutral point of view
This submission is not FM approved
@Wes
I will finish this: asap