This review is for: YSA Recon
The submitted article is/hasβ¦
[Y] A very high level of overall quality
[Y] A general topic sentence under the title header
[N] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[Useful] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[Y] In the proper format/template
[Y] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[Y] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[Not Quite] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[Nope] No red and/or broken links
[It's hard to not be plausible] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[Y] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does notβ¦
[N] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[Nah] Obtusely redundant
[Nada] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[Nope!] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[N] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[*shakes head*] Use second-person language (βyouβ or βyourβ) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[Nope] Use bombastic language (βvirtually immune,β βnearly indestructible,β βinsanely powerful,β βhorrible effectsβ)
[N] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[N] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[N] Lacking Detail
[N/A] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article hasβ¦
[N/A] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[N/A] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[Y] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[N/A] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
The only significant issue that seems to have risen is the discussion of the symbol; I believe that will be resolved soon, though.
Can you try to make a couple more links around the article please, especially for people like me who aren't involved in the military and/or don't know what a "esprit de corps " is/means? (Sometimes people have linked to Wikipedia or other external sources for stuff like that.)
Status: Pending
Notes
For the bit about skills, may I suggest formatting the skills themselves with something such as an underline so they stand out a bit more? It just looks neater in general~
Some sentences don't play nice when read aloud, usually by running on a little bit; one in particular ("If needed, they are expected to make a stand to the last man to buy time for the main force, casualty rates in Recon are higher than many other occupations.") probably should be turned into two complete sentences, for example.
I intend to finish this review by: June 15th, 2018