Zekec
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https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:adelphress_svenghouli
I was told to resubmit this since I was gone a while, so here it is!
I was told to resubmit this since I was gone a while, so here it is!
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Approved Character [YSS Imperator] Adelphress Svenghouli
- Thread starter Zekec
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@HAMnJAM (GM) @Ametheliana (Generally good person for reviewing this stuff)
Looks pretty good, though!
Looks pretty good, though!
My only things are:
The Family list generally fits under the Social Connections tab
You still mention requesting YSS Eucharis in her history
While mentioning the she requested being on the Eucharis isn't bad, you still allude she was assigned there. A suggestion would be to add a line saying she was denied for Eucharis and requested/got assigned Imperator instead. Again, only a suggestion, it is your character after all.
The Family list generally fits under the Social Connections tab
You still mention requesting YSS Eucharis in her history
While mentioning the she requested being on the Eucharis isn't bad, you still allude she was assigned there. A suggestion would be to add a line saying she was denied for Eucharis and requested/got assigned Imperator instead. Again, only a suggestion, it is your character after all.
