Right, finally over here.
From the top;
You're after the
NH-33m, not the old stuff. I would enjoy if you made links to everything, especially species and ranks. I don't care either way about any occupational codes, so that's fine.
Appearance is alright, personality probably could be improved in time, but it's fine now.
History is alright. There are a few minor issues with it, however; she has served for a whole five years, a year away from completing her second tour even. Is there a particular reason she would still be relatively low in rank and be assigned to a messy bit of space - On a tiny escort, no less?
Nothing that won't get you approved or anything, but so long as you realize there is something
off with that picture.
While it seems we've gone away from the whole "only seven skills" thing, you only have six! Feel free to grab at things you might want. You don't need to have seven or more, of course.
And you can just link to the
standard issue for gear.