I don't think you can be a clone of your own son. Can we make the physical description section a little more straightforward? I don't know that a "fair" set of hips look like or when you say gold, do you mean golden or literal gold tone. Try to write this as if you expect an artist to use this as their sole reference, because it might happen soon.
It might make more sense to say she got out of the Star Army in YE 38 instead of YE 39, based on the term of enlistment being 3 years old, so this would have meant she re-enlisted 4 times and didn't reenlist in YE 38 when her contract was up.
Again, the contracts are 3 years, and you can't just quit in the middle of it (I mean you can, but then you'll end up in the stockade).
I noticed she's missing her rank on the bio - are there civilian instructors at ZHS? Also did you need me to estimate what rank she was when she got out?