People are worried about basically what the
Iromakuanhe have being added in again as a power creep. For those that won't click it, personal arms can be added at the wrist under the subsection I linked, but the whole page is a real "your mind's the limit" cybernetics page for Iromakuanhe. So it's not a power creep, this conceptt has been in the setting for many years.
I don't even know where to begin to look where it says Nepleslians can get weapons embedded in them, let alone shields or power supplies. What's in the article thus far aren't those things, yet. Most of these are biomechanical and maybe more of them should be
@demibear to avoid being like Nepleslia with a lot of mechanical attachments, they are more along the lines of nanomachine creations across the board? If we could make Yamatai's use of cybernetics as individual as the faction they are being made in, I'll be happy.
As an aside and not my main point, cybernetics isn't on the main Nep page, the faction page for Neps, there is no cybernetic on the military equipment page, the only time cybernetics and Nepleslia are closely tied on the wiki is this wiki page and character pages, and the detailed cybernetics page from 2005 isn't even backlinked on any Nep pages except for the Gunhund page I made. Whatever argument there is for Nepleslia being the best in cybernetics, follow it up on the wiki so that people don't have to rely on guesswork and FM forum posts on submission boards to know that.
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Here are some fixes this article still needs:
1. "It was later added to the military upgrade
Minkan receive with the
YE 42 Upgrade package." to "It was later added as an optional military upgrade
Minkan receive with the
YE 42 Upgrade package."
2. Link AIES, Pantheon.
3. "Yamataian biomechanical and mechanical cybernetics largely follow the same classification as
Nepleslia for simplicity." This should be above in Nep category if it's truly about Nepleslia, but as I mentioned earlier, this article isn't really Nepleslian. It's a general tech article not backlinked more than once by Nepleslia, you could just say, "Yamataian biomechanical and mechanical cybernetics largely follow the same classification as international standards [linked] for simplicity."
4. "replacement of the arm " within the leg section should probably be leg, no?
5. Can you incorporate Wes' ideas more into this?
6. I'm not comfortable with civilians getting these. Is it just the wording confusing me? Are these military body upgrades only? If not, please discuss why or change it about. I think some of these could be under a civilian header and some under a military use only one.
7. I also know you're trying to appease the spaghetti on the wall, but making it prestige and occupation based over rank based gives Yamatai classist overtones it doesn't have. Everyone is given a monthly stipend and shelter, but only some civvies can jump really high with shin implants? Doesn't add up.
8. This could be way more detailed without being limiting. On top of taking Wes' recommendations, check out that Iromakuanhe article I linked above for just how in depth it can get.
When these fixes are made, please post a reply here so I can re-check the article. Thank you!