Greetings and welcome to SARP, I am the Faction Manager of the Abwehran Star Empire and Game Master of the 69th Paramilitary Squad. Thank you for taking an interest in the Abwehrans species.
I've noticed that your list of preferred plots includes the Bounty Hunter Series, the LSDF Akahar, and the NSV Gam'trosha. The Gam'trosha is a plot run by Kalshion and is from a species that has currently not made first contact with any other faction in SARP, so it might not be a viable options unless Kalshion decides to make an exception. The LSDF Akahar is a Lorath Matriarchy vessel and hasn't made any treaties or alliances that would allow an active military person from the Abwehran Armed Forces onto it, though again --- Luca might have ideas on how it could fly. The Bounty Hunter Series is a plot run by Foxtrot813 and it would be the easiest plot for a Field Agent to enter, though I would speak to him for ideas.
I would love another character for the 69th Paramilitary Squad, which is currently the only Abwehran faction plot available. However, it is currently closed while I renovate the Abwehran Character Creation Guide.
Now for the Character:
- Nachrichtendienst - I normally prefer to have Nachrichtendienst Agents (the Intelligence Branch of the Abwehran Armed Forces) played by experienced writers of SARP. However, I'm willing to waive it.
- Abwehrans and Cybernetics - Abwehrans have a great deal of difficulty with cybernetics due to their resilient immune system (which attacks foreign particles rather viciously). In order for Abwehrans to have implants/cybernetics, they must take an immune-suppressant. This dulls the immune system and causes Abwehrans to be more susceptible to illnesses. It would definite make interacting with the character interesting and would add to your characters depth if you mentioned it.
- Wheelchair Bound - This is, by far, the biggest issue I have with the character. To be wheelchair bound while actively in the military is something that doesn't happen in real life. Even with four arms, an Abwehran would be a liability in combat if his legs did not work. In the case of the Nachrichtendienst, they might employ Agents that have been immobilized as Analysts if they have the capability for it. He could be ex-Nachrichtendienst or even a civilian, but not active military.
- Background - Why would seeing his family induce a coma? How did he get so badly injured? How was his childhood and his military training? These things could be fleshed out.
- Skills - Starting every boilerplate with "This is from" seems a bit much and some variation in wording would go a long way. Many of these don't describe the level of ability he has in these skills. You might also want to replace the word 'Rouge' with 'Rogue'.
- Formatting - When linking the Nachrichtendienst article to your character sheet, I would suggest using [[abwehran star empire:military:nch:nachrichtendienst]] as the wiki code.
Over all, the character needs some work and Game Masters need to be consulted. But if you put a bit of effort into it, this could be a good character.
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