6. I've hesitated to mention this before, but your grammar and spelling are ... wonky. Not the worst I've ever seen, but you use odd phrasings and a lot of comma splicing ("August never really had a family, but he did have two little sisters, which he loved dearly, his mom and dad were always away or drunk.." ... sted "August never really had a family, but he did have two little sisters, which he loved dearly. His mom and dad were always away or drunk.")
a. "he was never doing anything fun or special because he was taking care of his sisters," sted "he never did anything fun or special ..."
b. "A little too eager to get into trouble and responsibilities, a very ambitious young man and quite the socializer, but not to the point of a ladies man, rather of a good friend, somebody you can really trust, he even has a rebellious side to him."
I bring this up because the potential I see in you is quite real, and I don't want people to nag you for grammar stuff, especially when it's this borderline. Remember that most sentences shouldn't pile over 20 words and you'll be OK.