That's my point though,
@Wes. If he's uncomfortable with writing an accent that isn't even his to develop, than it shouldn't be included. It's been removed though, so it's a moot point.
On the eyelashes, if it's annoying, why would he want them? That's not something that you can get by accident, and choosing to apply a mutation to your body (one that could, in theory, cause some pretty serious damage to the eyes) seems like an odd decision for someone with knowledge of the damage it could cause.
The first paragraph in the personality is still off. At the very least, the second and last sentences should be removed, though I honestly think it would be better to remove the whole paragraph.
I have to say, the atychiphobia addition is definitely interesting, though I don't know if it would really work. In any scientific field, failure is regular, and consistent. I doubt he would get far as a biologist if he literally breaks down when he fails.
You still need to clarify the "classified" reason for his brother. That isn't negotiable.
The reason given for him picking up the ears seems rather flimsy, to be honest. If he just wants to get them, that's fine, but saying he go them "as a sign of his mother's species" when she transferred into that body twenty years into his life seems rather silly. If anything, that reasoning makes me think he'd try to stay as pure human as possible, since that's her ACTUAL species, not a body she transferred into. This holds especially true given when she left the military, because in YE28, she probably would have transferred back OUT of the Neko body, to prevent being considered a reservist (since neko bodies were government property, at the time).
The last paragraph of the history has me a bit confused. I'm not quite sure on what you're trying to say there, and most of it doesn't seem to add up. Could you clarify what you're getting at for me? I'll help you rewrite it once I understand what you're aiming for.
I know I forgot to bring this up before, but which Lorath language is he learning? They actually have several distinct dialects within their nation.
Here is a link to the page, to help you clarify.
Did a bit of re-writing in the skills section, outside of the little grammar/spelling edits. Look it over and let me know what you think. My edits remove the issues I've had with the skill section, while maintaining the general feel of the skills and character, I think.
Like last time, you're definitely getting closer. The history looks much better, and is more consistent now, and the skills, on the whole, read much better even before I tweaked them.
