Rejected Submission [Elysia] Elysian Product Nomenclature System

[FrostJaeger]

• Submission Type: Nomenclature System
• Submission WIP URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:faction:elysia:nomenclature
• Submission Destination URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=faction:elysia:nomenclature
• Original Article URL: N/A

• Faction: Elysian Celestial Empire
• FM Approved Yet: Yes, eleven seconds from now.
• Faction requires art? Nope.

• Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Nope.
• Contains New Art? Nope.
• Previously Submitted? Nope.
• Changelog: N/A
• Checklist Requested? Yes.

It's amazing what one can accomplish in a few hours with an actual laptop.

 

[FrostJaeger]

I'd like for this submission to be placed on hold, @CadetNewb, as I will be overhauling and re-submitting the revised Elysian Calendar within the next couple of weeks.

 

[FrostJaeger]

Though it's been nearly a month, I've finally gotten around to re-submitting the Elysian Calendar Update - so would @META_mahn, @Arbitrated, or @CadetNewb mind changing the status of this submission to "Pending," please?

 

[FrostJaeger]

Bump @META_mahn, @Arbitrated, and @CadetNewb.

 

[FrostJaeger]

Hey, @Arbitrated and/or @META_mahn, could you help me out by getting this thread moving again? I'd appreciate it a lot. Thanks!

 

[META_mahn]

Elysian Co-FM. I can't do this submission and I don't think Arbs can either due to that. Needs to be one of the staff although I'm sure they'll just throw a 3-day timer at it.

 

[Wes]

I still think it makes more sense for Elysia to just the international standard (Yamatai and Nepleslia's) one instead of making their own version.

 

[FrostJaeger]

Acknowledged, @Wes - I'm withdrawing this submission.

Edit: Instead of withdrawing it, might I suggest a compromise? The Elysian Nomenclature System would use the same letters as the international one - with the exception of "S," as Elysia utilizes that for its Seraphim - but would use Elysian years for its subsystems (i.e. a weapon subsystem made this year would be El-D2-W1100 instead of El-D2-W4000).

 

[FrostJaeger]

@Wes - I've reworked the Product & Subsystem Types to more closely resemble the Standard Product Nomenclature System.

 

[FrostJaeger]

Would @Ametheliana mind reviewing this, please? I'd appreciate it a lot. Thanks~ ovob

 

[Ametheliana]

This review is for: Elysian Product Nomenclature with URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:faction:elysia:nomenclature

The submitted article is/has…
[X] A very high level of overall quality
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[-] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[See below] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[X] In the proper format/template
[X] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[X] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[X] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[X] No red and/or broken links
[X] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[X] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[X] Obtusely redundant
[X] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[See below] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[See below] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[X] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[X] Lacking Detail
[-] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[-] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[X] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[See below] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.

NOTES:
It contains ref's to IC events that haven't occurred only because these events were going to be canonized in this wiki page, not a problem. Nothing else is a problem. There is good formatting and it is clear and understandable.
It isn't needed or useful to the setting. Elysia is a faction, but is also a Suzerainty and ultimately would defer to Yamatai for the international standard.
I recommend keeping this on ice until it is a better time for Elysia to take such a leap of independence.

Rejected