(Brief Overview Sentences: Include Manufacturer, Years Produced, Current Users)
Please take the above sentence in parentheses out.
Muzzle Flash: (Describe the visible light that comes from the end of the weapon as it discharges. Include the shape of the muzzle flash as well as size and color)
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I noticed that the effective range is:
Effective Range: 2km in atmosphere
But the "dove" has a range of:
Range: 500m
And the "albatross says:
Ammunition:Ahōdori(Albatross)
An arrow with a small propulsion charge that fires mid flight to increase flight range.
Average DR: Tier 4
Range:5km
Maybe stipulate in the former range efficacy statement that it is like, "(Only 2km in atmosphere if it is gauss assisted and higher in range if charged with a propulsion enhancement such as the Albatross arrow seen below.)"? Idk doesn't have to be that, but saying it is 2km in atmosphere and then having two arrows in which it is not 2km in atmosphere makes it confusing unless you say something like what I outlined.
Ammunition:Washi(Eagle)
arrow filled with explosives designed to detonate on impact, the shaft has been made out of Durandium Alloy so that it can shrapnel along with the arrow.
Please put
AN arrow at the front of the sentence.
Firing Mechanism:The arrow is accelerated by the tension of the released string, and then further increased in speed as the magnetic inserts are passed through the gauss rings in the riser.
Loading:Loaded like a normal bow
Mode Selector:squeezing the trigger unfolds the gauss rings and activates them
Firing Modes: Gauss-Assisted and Normal firing modes
Safety Mechanism: A small switch can be flipped in the top portion of the riser to lock the trigger to keep gauss assist from engaging.
Weapon Sight:Adjustable pin sight that underlays with HUD information for more accurate information.
Attachment Hard Points: mounting space for the pin sight as well as for a mounted quiver.
In the above set of statements please a) put a space between the colons and the statements you make in ever instance (ex. Loading:Loaded... should be Loading: Loaded...) b) Decide if you want a period at the end of each or not c) capitalize the beginning of your statements after the colons.
...warrant this specialized weapon (Add a colon or period to the end of this statement)
...scans till firing. (Until not till)
What were you thinking company-wise? Any thoughts or should we start looking together?