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Can you show me where Hanako's World was attacked in YE 40? That was YE 41 if I recall. Please change those dates if it was not 40.
"While she doesn't strictly follow the ways of Sensou and her career is mainly focused on a supportive role." Just be aware of complete sentences as this is not one. It was the only instance of an incomplete sentence that I saw, though. Complete sentences guide link: here.
Unless she iniitally comes off as traitorous, consider taking out "While it doesn't show at first..." and just have the full sentence be without it: "Kazue stands behind the ethics of the Motoyoshi Clan and believes that the Yamatai are the strongest and best of the galaxy."
"Kazue got the same appearance as her fellow Nekovalkyrja, Type 33. " This sentence seems weird. Neko are all unique, even in height and weight. Maybe saying this would be a truer statement:, "Kazue is similar in appearance to her fellow Type 33 Nekovalkyrja."
All in all, awesome job and sorry for nit picking.
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