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  • Current IC Month: 9月 YE 42 (through December 31, 2020)

Approved Submission [NDC] "Mithril" Military Bodysuit

Whisper

Submissions Reviewer
FM of NDC
Game Master
Submission URL
https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=corp:conclave_ship_works:uniforms:mithril
List Any Unapproved Sub-Articles
Submission Faction(s)
  1. NDC
Submission Terms
  1. I agree
It's the Mithril, a bodysuit for the NDC! Has a variety of RP-fluff features to make things fun and keep characters alive.

The sub-article is a new corporation that will be making this suit and other future stuff for the NDC. Pretty simple, I think, but it has a lot of mostly fluff around how the corp operates.

As an FM of the NDC, I approve!
 

Syaoran

Staff Member
Submissions Reviewer
Okay so first the suit, it looks good there is just one thing that I think needs to be handled. The suit needs a section called Controls or Operations that explains which interface systems work with it, and what functions are usable without said interface. I understand it's meant to be used with the geist as the primary, but it's best to have a centralized place where people can look quickly and see what their character can do with it.

Also I guess it would also be best to under materials give a quick rundown of what the helmet is made of? I think I know the answer, but I'm not sure I know it.
 

Whisper

Submissions Reviewer
FM of NDC
Game Master
Okay, I think I've addressed your points. Let me know if I missed something. Thanks!
 

Syaoran

Staff Member
Submissions Reviewer
Ok the suit is looking good now. As for the company, it looks good, so I'll approve them both
 
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