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Here's some fixes this article still needs:
Remember American spelling of armor doesn't include a u and that linking Neshaten in the first intro paragraph is important. I did both these things for all of the articles already, but next time.
Overall these seem like they don't fit into the tech levels- they're far behind, honestly. Is there any way you can make the materials in the equipment fit the tier you are aiming for them to be?
I want to thank you a million times for not having anything formatting-wise that needed fixing, so thank you!!!!
Specifics for each are below.
For the shield:
I edited spelling and added a link.
Mention somewhere that the area over the camera is more susceptible to damage and why, but don't give a specific area a new tier, just have the whole thing be one tier.
The first sentence of design is convoluted. Maybe if you added "that" between input and is mounted, it would make more sense.
Seems OP for a hunk of metal at tier 4. Add some kind of shielding or knock it down a tier or two.
Helmet:
I edited spelling and added a link.
Looks good.
Armor:
Can you include what the vest with armor plating looks like in appearance?
Also seems OP as tier 3 for something that is presumably just another piece of metal. Speaking of, what kind of metal is this?
When these fixes are made, please post a reply here so I can re-check the article. Thank you x a million!!