Alright. Thanks for adding the changes I asked via PM, the bio is a lot more solid now.
Three things that still come to my mind before I approve this for Bounty Hunts, though. two are important while the other is just a pet peeve of mine, repectively:
- The personality is still pretty small. Please add more stuff for it before I approve the character. For example, you say there that Katya doesn't speak much, why? What caused her to be like that and how did/does that affect her relationship with people. What set of values and morals does she have, how does she feel when faced with X, are good examples of what I mean.
- I'm just curious, but is she actually blind, or squints all the time? It would be cool to clear it out.
- While I don't think this is a problem (unless there is some dark and forgotten submission rule I missed), since the information on the character comes across, I think it would be nice to write all the info like it's actually a wiki article, citing more facts rather than opinions, especially information that's more technical, such as her appearance. For example:
Instead of
Change to