Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...
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] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.
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] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern).
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] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
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Here are some fixes this article still needs:
- Would you mind filling in the Getting In and Out, Life Support, Power Systems, and Sensors and Communications sections, please?
- For the Getting In and Out section, how does someone put the armor on (and take it off)?
- For the Life Support section, all I'm really looking for is how long the filter in the helmet's gas mask can last before it needs to be replaced - 24 hours, maybe?
- For the Power Systems section, all I'm really looking for is what powers the helmet's electronics - a U-G4000 Hyperspace Tap Generator, perhaps?
- For the Sensors and Communications section, all I'm looking for is what kind of rangefinder the helmet uses (laser-based or radar-based?), the maximum range of the armor's communications system, and the type of communications system it has - radio, I'm guessing?
- In the Armor Size section, would you mind including how much the Security Combat Armor adds to its wearer's length, width, and height, please?
- @Zack, the Faction Manager of Uso's Star Organization, needs to post his approval of the submission in this thread.
When these fixes are made, please post a reply here so I can re-check the article. Thank you!
Status: Pending
