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Are there shields or not? If it is just the energy cloak then you may want to move the cloak two it’s own header rather than nesting it under shields, then remove shields entirely.
Also, are we getting rid of the ‘no shields unless you’re wearing some armor’ rule? I’m totally for that since SARP’s volumetrics tech is already super widespread.
If i may make a couple more suggestions as a community member
The mobility section lists the devices it uses relevant to its mobility but could probably use expanding to give a brief description on if:
- it boosts speed or not
- boosts strength relative to agility based actions (like getting gud front flips)
Also just a reading thing that stuck out to me like a glowing weapoint, thanks english class, in the controlling the suit section it becomes semi future tense which ultimately is spooky in wiki articles.
Current: user movement is how the use will control...
Suggested: user movement is how the user controlls...
This should fit nicely in place of the original if you decide to use it ^^
The submitted article is/has… [ Yes ] A very high level of overall quality
[ Yes ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ Yes ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[ Yes ] Needed and/or useful to the setting
Useful for bodyguard purposes.
[ Yes ] In the proper format/template
[ Yes ] Proofread for spelling and grammar [ Somewhat ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
Oh god the equipping process. Can it be any shorter?
[ Yes ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[ Yes ] No red and/or broken links
[ Yes ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[ Yes ] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not… [ No ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ No ] Obtusely redundant
[ No ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ No ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ No ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ No ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ No ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ No ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ No ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ No ] Lacking Detail
[ No ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[ No ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
What's the speed?
[ No ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
What's the armor tier?
If there's no armor tier, just write down Armor Tier 0 (Shield Tier whatever)
[ Yes ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ No ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
It isn’t an issue that’ll hold up approval, but it isn’t simple either, like a “basically hop in a Mindy.” It would be nice to shorten it but if that’s as far as it can go it’ll have to do.
The Mindy article has about four paragraphs for getting in and out.
I also am thinking of giving it a Tier 2 rating as it is made of really nice materials and has a photonics array. Would that be an issue?
Speeds would look like:
Maximum atmospheric speed (For earth-like worlds): 1500 kph (9321 mph), Mach 1.40 at sea level
Maximum space speed: .35c - Software-limited to 10 G acceleration
I just dumbed down what the same engines do on the Mindy and did maths.
Since I'm just now checking this out, and seeing Iromakuanhe Clothblades being used, it has my thumbs up for their usage in the Shibui. Just putting that out there just in case.