You have many many discrepancies that need to be addressed for this to pass inspection. Thus, I shall be here to help a bit with the process. ROIGHT.
1. Freespacers FTW
2. Freespacers only live to about 25. They can look that age but their chronological age is much lower. (I have a 5 yr old freespacer that looks 15)
3. Freespacers wouldn't have a military, per se as they are a very non-violent society. Thus, he would not remember his father as a military man. ALSO, they are born from a gene-bank and would not remember at all anyways.
4. Where is the description of his Diatom crystal?
5. FREESPACERS ARE NOT BADASSES. They are smartasses. ^_^ You can give him all these badass characteristics, but he at the least must have an overlaying personality of non-violence.
6. It was only months previously that Freespacers met neplesians, and thus would never have met before. You need to change the history to reflect his birth home, which would be a mothership.
7. Also, a lot longer history would be very good.
8. SKILLS: you have to have 2 skills to be a freespacer. Also, he would never have learned to fight previously, so that must be changed, but he could learn onboard the Phoenix, so you won't have that problem after a time.
-Hacking. Great! You can keep that, as freespacers are great hackers. He wouldnt have learned it at school, as freespacers never go to school. They do job training though.
9. Freespacer type threes are extremely creative and love art as a general rule.
10. TITLE: you need to change the name of your character to the standard naming process that freespacers use. Reference my character's bio and the freespacer article.
11. No ranks. Freespacers are anarchists, ergo, no ranks.
Boy that is a lot of changes. I kinda ate your bio; sorry bout that. However, as I am here to help, please use these links to help your fledgling character out.
My character, Kassiopea. This is her bio:
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=sp ... -7908-0045
Freespacer article:
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=fr ... reespacers
Creating a freespacer article:
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ccg:freespacers
EDIT: I was one of the first two to sign up as a freespacer, so if you need to get answers about them, ask me. If I don't know, ask Strangelove, creators of the awesome race of freespacers.