You'll just have to find out, Konoka.
By the way, Konoka, I still want more paragraphs from you.
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Shotjon, I was waiting a bit to get an handle on your writing style before commenting about it. Now, I'm about ready to. So, here goes:
- Your posts have a lot of effort put in them, but they also seem hurried. The reason I get that impression is due to them often having several typo errors. Mind you, I do plenty myself. I often do multiple edits on my post after submitting them to fix them or reword some things better. I suggest you try revisiting yours too - there are obvious errors that I'm sure that you could wipe away with just a simple reread.
- You often write present tense, whereas I most of this plot's participants write it more in past tense, the way you'd read a story ("He invited her to dinner", "She accepted and went to get her things"). Do you think you could try sticking to that approach?
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Khasidel, on about the same line, I also wanted to comment on your vocabulary.
"Whilst". You use it pretty often. It's kind of an old english word that tells me that you must like reading medieval fantasy. It's an okay word in narrative, but Reika's started to use it. ICly, people are going to notice.
I mean, "Whilst" is a word in the same category as "thou", "art" and "hast". People are bound to notice. That might be okay, though I'd bring up the question "would Reika speak like that"?
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Tom, it feels to me like Akiko's focus is very centered on Konoka. I know you two play off each other the most easily, but be careful not to make that a clique. Looking at Konoka go, I don't think she had much of a problem branching out... but I do think that Akiko could stand out more too for other people (and not necessarily in the 'I-try-not-to-get-caught-annoying-them way - if Akiko interacts as a person with Konoka, surely she can do the same with other people).